Blog 11

This was taken from a biology paper I had written, I had underlined the the transitions as well as the many pointing terms in the paper, and boxed and circled any forms of repetition and key terms. It is a shock to revisit a piece written and be able to find all of these words and commonality’s that occur in paper to the point that I felt these transitions were not even used that much. I feel like since it was a biology paper it required a good deal of pointer terms in order to get to the point trying to be proven.

Do you see any patterns?

I do see quite a lot of patterns, the paper itself was describing the effects of osmosis and that word itself is present numerous times throughout just this page alone of the paper. I also see a lot of the use of pointer terms to progress through the paper to push the reader from “point a” to “point b”.

Do you rely on certain devices more than others?

I feel I relied on the pointer terms and the key term repetition just by taking a glance of the highlights. It was a weird trend to see if I were to use a pointer term they would almost always begin with the letter t so it was almost like a search for the letter t to see if their were pointers in this essay. Key terms I feel like were necessary to be able to tell the reader what this piece itself entails and brings back to the point you are trying to prove in a wordy scientific paper.

Are there any passages that are hard to follow?

Overall since it was a scientific piece it was very straight to the point, there was not much jumping around because it had to make sense in order for the paper itself to be successful, if as a scientific paper was not logical the whole process and or experiment could go drastically wrong.

Peer Review

Dear ___,

Overall you have a great paper and are on your way for a great mark on this paper. One of the only things I would maybe look into is the paragraph where you compare Pinker to Ma. I feel on that paragraph you do a great deal arguing between the two, but do not really connect it back to yourself. I felt like your inclusion of the naysayer paragraph really made this paper more well round by providing the opposition’s side. If you felt like you could or needed to, you could incorporate some more connections to yourself, to in a way gear the reader to want to believe and take your claims more just due to the fact that you have experienced it. Overall it was a great read thank you for letting me read it and you are on track for a great paper!

 

Blog #10

Prompt: Ideal relationship between art and sciences inside the projected career path or current discipline.

Free write Brainstorm idea:

I personally feel in the field of physical therapy both science and arts go hand and hand amongst that career. The way that Yo-Yo Ma describes the arts to incorporate empathy I feel is one of the most needed things to be a successful physical therapist. If it was not for the empathy towards your client their strive to get better would not be achieved,  and if they keep failing rather than just giving up on them as a “lost hope”, you need the empathy to be able to keep motivating them and being able to still give them positive attitudes even when failing to achieve a certain goal. Physical Therapy of course has  strong relations to the science field as most of my classes in university are geared towards scientific learning  and thought processes. One thing I feel that UNE does really well, for being a well known science school, requires all students to at least one fine arts program, which I feel is great because the learning and throughout processes in those class may better shape the learner you are, or provide you with new ideas to use in your science fields. Lehrer’s paper is a great way to describe the sciences and arts in the path I am going towards. A lot of his arguments are that science needs art in order to keep finding out new information about the world around us and I believe that pertains to my career. There are numerous new amounts of research and information being done towards new methods of healing a body and the body itself. I feel like the arts play a key component in allowing us to believe that there are new forms of processes and ideas to look into when looking at the human body and I feel these arts have shaped the career of physical therapy to what it has became today. Pinker’s ideas I feel did not have to much connection in my field, I can see others where they may be over done with the science concepts but I truly feel that there is a balance between the arts and sciences in the field of Physical Therapy.

Blog #9

Pinker to Ma

Both Steven Pinker and Yo-Yo Ma argue that the science as a whole can not stand alone without the help of many other sources of incorporation. Where in Ma’s essay “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education” he believes that the incorporation of arts and empathy must be used in the sciences or there will ultimately be a standstill in advances in the scientific fields. He shows this through quotes such as “values of collaboration, flexibility, imagination, and innovation- all skill sets needed in today’s world- is through the performing arts”. This shows us his believe that the idea of the science if rather than trying to distinguish themselves from the fields of art should all collaborate in order to advance the scientific fields. To be able to conceptualize the tough data and presentations of the sciences, arts are key in being able to turn that information into understandable meanings for the general public. On the other end, Steven Pinker in his essay “Science Is Not Your Enemy” argues that religion should be taken part alongside the sciences. He compares the sciences to religion with the quote “Just as reviled is the application of scientific reasoning to religion; many writers without a trace of a belief in God maintain that there is something unseemly about scientists weighing in on the biggest questions. With this he looks towards the religions in the sense that the information that is portrayed is truthful because “it is” and “it says so” and therefore that trend in some senses could be used in the sciences. Rather than having to argue and validate every single point of info and data that comes up in scientific research some of the info should just be what data was found and left there “as is”. These writers believe that the sciences is necessary in every day of life, but it can not be by itself, with the incorporation of many other ideas or arts the science as a whole could be improved.

Pinker to self

As Pinker states in his essay “Science Is Not Your Enemy”  how the use of religion should be incorporated into some of the sciences, I agree with his stand to a certain degree. He Starts off his essay with mentioning innovators in the field of the sciences such as “Descartes, Spinoza, Hobbes, Locke, Hume, Rousseau, Leibniz, Kant, Smith” showing us his stand on who he believes the sciences have been formulated from. With the quote “I often long to travel back in time and offer them some bit of twenty-first-centuary freshman science that would fill a gap in their arguments or guide them around a stumbling block” shows us the advances that have came about from today’s development in the sciences due to the facts of continually looking into one thing over and over finding new and important information to the subject at hand. What Pinker is arguing with this point is that in a sense they are losing their credibility because they missed key points all over their original points they had brought up. I agree upon his argument as he continues through his essay that science should incorporate the teachings of religion. Religion has a concept that no matter what the information provided “is what it is” their is no further investigation and therefore the sciences should take that into consideration so that these founders of sciences have the ability to say their findings “is that and only that”.