____’s ideas brought up throughout the paper were very interesting and very good overall. It was really interesting seeing a paper done from the opposing side and in a way helped shaped the rest of group seeing opposing sides for each person. I felt overall the information provided was great, the uses of text and other sources made it very strong. The only point I would say to focus on is their are some points brought up in your essay where you could expand and bring in more of your voice to tie into the text. Your idea brought up about the significance of memmories for each person could be. a great place to expand on! overall this was a great free draft and I really enjoyed your usage of the multimodal with the drawings and the background doodle it visual appealed and helped guide the reader.

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