Based from the peer review, my goals to revise are to focus on a few points in my essay. throughout I describe a great deal both sides of people and narratives but are very vague to when it comes to my opinion, so my first goal is to add in my claims my beliefs of narratives playing a role in our lives The second goal I want to fix is the point when I talk about my girlfriend from the narrative project. I mention it but don’t describe it which is confusing if the audience had never heard it so my point would not get across

I plan to re read my claims, looking at where I was two sided and in a sense add my own stand to it, or even conclude my paper with my side so the audience nows where I place myself. For the part about my girlfriend I will either move the video link up to right under that paragraph or describe what was mentioned in the video so the audience has an idea prior to watching.

My biggest challenge will be making sure to stay true to my side, with such a topic like this it is easy to drift between each side, so I have to stay strong and bold to narratives playing a role.

If it is to difficult to solve on my own I could reach out to my peers and see if they have any more suggestion or even Emmy and they could gear me to success.