Dear ___,

Overall you have a great paper and are on your way for a great mark on this paper. One of the only things I would maybe look into is the paragraph where you compare Pinker to Ma. I feel on that paragraph you do a great deal arguing between the two, but do not really connect it back to yourself. I felt like your inclusion of the naysayer paragraph really made this paper more well round by providing the opposition’s side. If you felt like you could or needed to, you could incorporate some more connections to yourself, to in a way gear the reader to want to believe and take your claims more just due to the fact that you have experienced it. Overall it was a great read thank you for letting me read it and you are on track for a great paper!